Although I wouldn't say it was the finest novel I've ever read, it was still rather good considering it was your first. The noises were the only thing that bothered me; yes, I realize that you repeated them to let the reader comprehend that they were sounds. I thought some of the laughter was inappropriate, though it may have just been "ha ha" or "haha." Some noises also were. The ticks rather than repeat could of be "the tick repeated over and over again." rathe than tick tick tick tick.
I'm not sure what direction this novel is heading in, this is a peculiar read. The whole gimmick with this novel is despite being very generic it has a gimmick. There are system notifications for ever minor thing the protagonist does and these system notifications come with points that automatically strengthen the protagonists realm regardless of his will. The protagonist doesn't like this because his father, the emperor is a crazy jealous person and if he finds out, our protagonist is toast. A large portion of the words in this novel are just system notifications which makes this novel feel weirdly shorter than it is, it feels like gimmicky word count filler.This novel doesn't really have much going for it apart from it's bizarreness, there isn't anything about it that still feels new after the first 5 or so chapters. There isn't enough depth to it for it to be very interesting so I'm rather lukewarm on this one. 2/5.
I have only just started reading and already I hope to see the character develop more with his system and read what he will do with it I hope you don't leave the system out too much.
The best book I have seen so far hope Author doesn’t drop it
If you’re just reading the plot, you can skim the chapters and possibly enjoy. If you’re looking for a semi-intelligent mc, this is not for you. If you’re looking for original characters, this is not for you. If you’re looking for immersion, this is not for you.
The mc will plan out what he’s going to do, then act surprised when it actually happens.
The higher beings are generally stereotypical bad guys, callously looking at mortals as possessions (which is already found in a myriad of xianxia so not something that affected my rating)
The amount of breaking-the-wall that happens takes you out of the story, and loses any seriousness it may have had. (Personally not a fan)
In summary, a lot of aspects, especially character creation, are subpar. However the plot has its merits and could later progress into something quite significant.
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très amusant, le pouvoir est original et permet beaucoup de possibilité, j'ai lu d'une traite les 60 chapitre, j'ai vraiment hâte de découvrir la suite.Je recommande vivement.
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I enjoyed this book, however some parts of the story skip ahead without explaining in detail. Its well written and I can't wait for the next chapter, what will happen to davina entering the hell fire? Will she survive it? And will she ever reunite with her mate or fall for the dangerous fallen angel? Who knows. Looking forward to future books from this author.
Perfect so far I just hope this doesn't get dropped, it really pulled me in and made me feel attached. It truly is a great novel in the making
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