As the baby speedily grew in age, the thunderclouds dissipated just as fast. Soon, when the child reached the 2 years old milestone, only thin layer of vapor and thunder separated the outside world and this inner splendor. As the sheet was thinning, however, the harsh sunlight suddenly dimmed, like a flashlight running out of juice. In a blink of an eye, only a faint light remained of the yellow brilliance. Along with the drop in the Sunshine's luminosity was the emergence of pink flower tattoo with 12 petals on his left chest-side. The tattoo perfectly resembled the Immortal Chrysanthemum before the Sun's Primordial Qi rap—, uh, entered it. The only difference was that the tattoo version had only 12 petals.
The woman let loose breath what he figured was her version of a frustrated sigh. ''His vitals are all stable, his heartbeat is fine, his breathing is normal and if there was any wounds we may have
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Thanks for the chapter
Good premise but needs more story telling. Right now it's just a paragraph explaining the backround. If you are writing from third person then the narrator should fully introduce the princess after initial back round intro. Then everything that happens should be her thoughts or perspective. If it's first person then she narrates everything as it happens or happened depending on past or future tense. Don't give up though, I'm working on learning to do just that myself. Puting a story online is a good way to start learning. your story has potential and I would like to see more!
Napakunot ang noo ko ng makita kong diretsyo ang tingin sa akin ng officer na siyang naghuli at nagdala sa akin sa lugar na ito.
"I forgot to leave it in the garden,"
"I have AB negative blood, why? What's wrong?" She asked, hopping off of the bar stool she was sitting on.
I love this, I read all pass chapters in one go to this point. The heart strings have been pulled all over the place. AUTHOR MORE PLEASE!
mm... what about the project... how can we discuss as a group..... (Rick asks in his usual arrogant voice)
That's surprising.. She never lets me do anything. Whats got her in a good mood? Hm. Well now I gotta call T and tell her the good news.
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