Insane how the story is progressing and I must say I seriously like how the new characters are getting introduced! ?
Great Novel author i just love it i hope you don't drop this master piece of yours it truly has potential also please don't make the mc a goody to shoes i am just suggesting and the rest is up to yours truly
the Mc smokes do I really need to say anything else
Ok I am gonna give it straightFirst 30 chapters almost garbage from a readers perspective Are they important to the story? Yes very important. They set an important framework for the whole story. The story after that is quite enjoyable, I binge read all the way until I caught up with the story.The reason I have such disdain for the first 30 chapters is that, we as the readers have no context , who is Ryan? Asmodius? What blessing? Who is the girl? Why every girl wants to hit Ryan?I really wished I had clear info abt this story construction from the synopsis. Also the synopsis dosent really cover the actual of the story at all.Good thing abt the story is that the writing quality is pretty decent, unless there is major info dump. There is enough intrigue to hook the reader. I concept of the book is quite intresting.Some problems I would say are that there are too many characters introduced too early and at once. As a result everyone has a shallow personality. Currently only 2 people in the story have a proper personality: Ryan and Arian. Other than everyone else is superficial. Also this is clearly not a villain novel yet, bad marketing is never good.Some recommendations(you know best author, these are just personal opinions)More slice of life chapters: like mc and Selenea went on a ‘date’. You could have taken this aspect slow. Give us more perspective on what he is feeling which walking with her, them asking questions about each other. Maybe it will actually give an idea why Ryan started falling in love with Selena cause all I see is he got forced to say she is is gf, she bullied him into going places, she life when he complements her.Another thing I would say is add a few filler chapters, this adds on to the Slice of life aspect. Like mc talking abt the sword he got or a chapter abt him finding out that the fairy is enslaved by the earring. I am just saying the story does not need to go from one bug event to the next. You can slow down a bit and build the world.Also dial down the annoyingness of the mc. He has experience of 20+ years due to his 2 life’s. He dosent need to act childish or immature when talking with every single character.I would also appreciate chapter from other chapters pov(not too many but enough to give an idea)Again I am not saying the story is bad. I am just saying it is not refined enough to reach his full potential.
I love how he’s just going on a blowing minds❤️❤️❤️❤️ very well written will continue
it's a good read and i like this take on a system. the MC doesn't strike me as someone brain dead like you tend to find in stories similar to this.Having said that past chapter 30, the author definitely needs an editor. Names are missing letters, grammatical errors that force you to mentally substitute the word out, and it disrupts the overall flow. Kael selecting his squad should have been fun but was ruined by grammar issues. Adrian/Adria for the protagonist was particularly annoying. it's overall a fun read but not one that i would advise spending coins on.
To think there's such a nice novel and I didn't know about it, anyway its an amazing novel with a nice easy going plot and awesome characters hope the Author will update more chaps.
Just started reading. Looks kinda interesting. Lets see.
This book is going to be one of the biggest books on this app so watch out?♥️❤️?
many mistakes and not explained in detail but ig i will look forward to the future story if u could can u provide the cultivation stage and imp information fast cuz it will be hard to understand otherwise
Just caught up with the first seven chapters and I have to say, it’s quite a good start, at first, the pacing is a bit slow as the author mentioned too, as they are trying to lay out the world, there is also heavy info on the power system. But honestly, that slow burn really works here. It gives you time to soak in all the details and start piecing things together.The power system and the unique way of "borrowing" mana and the veil is a very interesting concept, personally I liked it alot.Aric Oswin, wakes up in this fantasy world in someone else's body, quite a generic start but hey the build-up was very good, you get the sense that things aren’t going to be easy for him. And the whole idea of being guided—or maybe manipulated—by the mysterious voice not knowing what will happen to him is quite good.Overall, the story sets up a lot of tension and mystery, and I'm excited to see where it goes. I'm hooked and curious to see how the story progresses.I will be giving it 5 stars for now to support, but this may change depending on the progression of the story.
a good and improving story ,really underrated