"You probably will be bedbound for a week or so, but I think she will find time to see you, she was pretty bored when you weren't around, even if, you were right here, in the city," She turned and looked at the door as she heard it open, she reached for her belt and pulled out a pistol. She aimed it at the door as Clara walked in. Clara froze and stared blankly at Catherine. She lowered her gun and sat back down. Clara walked over to the side of the bed and sat down where the doctor was sitting.
They went to their schools and finished their studies. After that, they finished their degrees and took the positions as the lords of the earth.
Now, finish your supper and see to your chores. We'll all be
Thank you for reading the JEALOUS CAT.
There are also locals who don't look Chinese. They are the Portuguese. They all look serious and talk seriously. The are the ones who spend their time in cafes and drinking their coffees.
… H-Huh?
I was impulsive and didn't hold back on my desire to date her. It was a fine two to three months, to be exact 2months 3 days 5 hours and 43 minutes.
He noticed my appraisal and smiled with a glint in his eyes.
'Why did I have to be in the middle of a forest…. Why the heck did he bury me in this place?'
First of all, I viewed your story in a reader's POV and not as a professional or something so you may find some fault in my review. There's something that I need to point out and here it goes:Just like what you said here in your review and author's note, the prologue was really too much to handle. It doesn't (you know) pull a reader to read the next chapters. Prologue is an introduction, you did a good job in it as a whole, I like how you ended it but you should tone down on your choices of word (I think it is the main reason that it's hard for a reader like me to continue, there's a lot of words that I don't understand hahaha) Aside from that, on your chapter 4 (the filler chapter) there's a phrase that has been bugging me for a while so I will point it out "You cannot afford to be heard, even when you are injured - especially when you injured. Bla bla" The part where you said especially when you injured, I feel that there's something lacking on it or it's entirely wrong but anyhow I hope you can fix it because it makes the reader confused. Other than that, I like how you narrate your story (You did a great job on it!) , especially when you're describing the things or the background, it makes the story realistic because the reader can also imagine the places, the person and etc. Overall, keep up the good work fellow author! I'll try to finish your story, I'm still in Chapter 6 and all I could say is the storyline is great so far. P.S please do keep in mind that I'm not familiar with this genre, so if you find fault on the things that I said, you can just disregard it.
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