I really must say am impressed with your style and presentation... So early on i can already feel the emotional element of the book pulling me to continue reading.. Such great talent from the author.
Awesome read! There's only three chapters so far but the world and the characters are beautifully painted (or war-painted). I'm a sucker for wars on paper, both steel-armed and political. And I can't wait to get to the latter. Also excited on what will become of Cornelius and Commodus. Only reason I didn't give full marks was the shifting tenses. But that can be easily remedied. I'd suggest to pick one and stick to it throughout. It's minor though and only slightly took me away from the fantasy. I hope this comment doesn't come off as harsh criticism but as fellow advice from a fellow author to another.Advice aside, this story was a breath of fresh air. I'd done some review swaps but I like your story the most so far. I'll put your story in my collection, not for the sake of it but because I'm already invested in where the author will take me. Kudos to you and keep up the great work!**: Haven't played Total War yet but because of your story, I might just give it a go :)
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60 chapters in and he's a one trick pony prince who acts like a pauper instead of a prince. He's not only getting his fortune improved, he's also plundering material benefits without impunity or restraint.The thinking is a little small and I'm not very optimistic about how he's going to get better because let's face it: these MCs never grow emotionally, they actually just become more shameless and/or lustful.All the really important people he's helping are jade beauties too...
Ok I'll be honest. I felt very emotional while reading you story Adam. You did a great job and I hate you for making it look like there are people cutting onions around me!