So far, going well. FL doesn't seem weak. I’m only on chapter 15, let's see how the rest of the chapters play out.
Amazing story . I love how every chapter got me hooked?. Nice job author !
Without a doubt what stands out the most is the depth of the characters, especially Hikaru, Akari, Emi, and Asuna, each one feels very alive.Also, the way you deal with anxiety seems quite real.And the other thing, the story and the play between comedy and drama is very well done.
Let's go with the good first:= the story is great - it's about introducing technology to medieval world that have some level of fantasy= not that technical - most of the time author just explain 1 aspect then continue the story= a bit like slice of life - not too many inside problem, most of the time mc just try to solve outside his kingdom problem, the problem inside the kingdom usually solve by introducing more technologyNow the bad stuff:= editor - this novel seriously need a good editor, too many misspelled or wrong choice of word, there also grammar problem but not major in my problem, even mc name sometimes misspelled, this is really big problem that want me to stop reading the novel= ending of an arc - some of the arc just end abruptly, there is no aftermath details
"I'm tired, lets just go to home."
My name isn't Carl, you fool. They named us as they want, what do they think we are?
Orb Watcher is a magic tool that copied a magic box, you know that box, there a show human in it.
"Oh of course I'm not forgot what happened when my Zeus and your Odin creation is destroyed the earth 781." While Light scratching his cheeks in shame.
Never! Never!
he smiled to himself and her parents notice and went stiff as if they know what he was thinking.
As Gohan was beginning to relax himself, he suddenly felt eyes on him. Gohan looked up to see that Azazel, Kiba and Gasper were looking toward his shoulder and chest, "I take it you're curious about these scars..." Issei then looked too after hearing Gohan, "HOLY CRAP GOHAN!"
*cubone* barely standing cubone use all his remaining energy in this last attack, he injected all his energy on his bone until the bone become bigger