realy cool concept, I hope it continues, hooked already .
The writing's got room for improvement (as others here may have noticed), but as of this review's posting, whatever flaws were present don't detract from the content itself too much. Additionally, it may be best to limit allusions to existing works in pop culture to a minimum. I particularly recommend looking up comma splices, run-on sentences and sentence fragments on Google since these are the common mistakes I came across in your work.PS - if you'd like a more detailed go-over, kindly PM me over Discord or something :)
Since you asked for it, here you go. Webnovel's rating feature is quite literally the most useless function on the planet, though. I normally leave my 1-star reviews on the websites people use to circumvent your paywall. 'Cause I don't pay for trash, and anyone that does is handicapped.
This isn't my usual genre of choice, but I found myself captivated from the first chapter. Seriously, the author does a wonderful job pulling you into the world, yet keeps enough mystery to always want more.I'll be keeping an eye on this one! Keep it up!!
Don't worry author man humans make mistakes including the fact that you are not even that old enough to know that the OPmc who can only get cucked by his girlfriend and cucked again later
This has to be one of the funniest stories I've ever read on webnovel. Pure comedy gold. Some of the grammar could perhaps do with a bit of a touch up, but it all adds to the unique charm and style. Even just the most routine things the protagonist does becomes hilarious. Like when he leaves a restaurant after eating a sandwich and gets felt up by a hobo who is checking if he just ate his own balls. Or when he comes across a *** party and is disgusted because all the participants are fat and unsexy people. Or even at the very start when he moves to a new city and passes through an area where only gangsters and prostitutes live. Sorry, my review can't quite do justice to lunacy you will experience if you read this! Give it a go for a good laugh!
Salut to the author! Dunno why everyone here has 4.5 ratings only... This is a good novel actually. The boy who seeks for his forever (Figure of speech). Wonderful! Big respect to the author!
the system is very convenient, it always says everything the protagonist needs, he doesn’t need to think, the levels don’t make sense the protagonist in level 1 can beat a group of goblins with levels between 5 to 15, because several classes it’s obvious which he will choose. it was better to just be born with it. I scored 3 because it has a certain potential, I will continue reading
The MC drifts from place to place falling into trap after trap like someone constantly slipping on banana peels. New plot lines keep opening up whilst old ones are left hanging. New questions continually pop up while previous questions go unanswered. MC was given the task to find the 5 pieces of the map from the first few chapters, after 500 chapters of not minding his own business he still hasn't found the 4th piece and decided to concentrate on revenge instead. Most of the setting (99%+) is wasted as the MC keeps going to new mysterious places and f*cking about while everyone he cares about gets murdered. You could say the author is just making sh*t up as he goes along. And you'd be right.The author's exact thoughts at the time of writing the MC:"How can I write someone to be as miserable and helpless as possible?"Here's the story in a nutshell:OMG I NEED TO FIND THE 5 PIECES OF THE MAP BEFORE THE OUTER SPACE DEMONS ARRIVEOh look here is a random village that I don't need to enter but I will do so for the lulzOh noes random people are getting chased by monsters I must protect them even though I've repeatedly said that I'm a selfish bastard but actually I'm a nice guySUDDENLY MONSTERS OUT OF f*ckING NOWHERE AND NOW I AM GETTING CHASED BY MONSTERS FOR 20 CHAPTERSWHAT! HOW DARE RANDOM STRANGERS THAT I DO NOT KNOW BETRAY ME! I AM VERY DISAPPOINTED! VERY SAD!!Oh look, a power struggle between random strangers. Must... not... get... involved [gets involved anyways][100 chapters later]Wow I just found about the existence of aliens maybe I should keep my book a secret[reveals he has the book to all the aliens]f*ck WHY ARE ALIENS CHASING ME[LITERALLY 400 chapters later]OMG I STILL HAVEN'T FOUND THE MAP BUT ALL MY FAMILY IS DEAD AND I DONT CARE ANYMORE! I HAVE TO KILL ALL THE ALIENS WHO KILLED MY FAMILY!![1000 chapters later the aliens are stronger than ever and he is still a weak shit]So the premise of the story is that the MC has a magical book that NOBODY knows exists because it's f*cking thousands of years old and everybody thinks it's a pile of junk. Also nobody could read it. Otherwise they would've taken it away from him already. The magical book contains magical spells and cultivation methods and deadly strong fighting techniques that can destroy entire armies with a single attack. The book tells the MC that the world will plunge into darkness in 2012 and a new age will begin that lets him use magic.Of course the MC is a blabbering idiot and tells everyone about 2012 by POSTING IT ON PUBLIC INTERNET FORUMS.The problem with this is that the MC states that he's incredibly selfish and cold and will place his own interests over other people's, and yet his actions show the exact opposite. Let's think about this. If it's true and NOBODY ELSE on the internet predicted the darkness then it means it's either:1. Top secret information that the government does not want anybody to knowor2. Information that even the government does not knowRegardless of whether if it's 1 or 2, the government as described in the story would obviously arrest and torture the MC and everyone who has ever had the misfortune of being in contact with him to find out how he came across the information. The MC's actions do not make any sense. Even Jesus reincarnate wouldn't go blabbering on about the darkness since NOBODY would believe it, and it would bring trouble to him later on because he would get arrested. Thus posting about it on the internet forums is the worst decision in every possible situation.There are a few more really dumb things that the MC does, like creating and wearing flashy looking armor that is instantly recognizable from miles away that NOBODY ELSE is wearing, using flashy fire and ice spells to kill bugs IN FRONT OF EVERYONE and so on. I'm actually surprised that the MC does not get found out by the aliens sooner.There are more shiit to this novel DON'T READ IT FOR THE SAKE OF YOUR SANITY JUST DON'T!!!!!!