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Thank you for you few people appreciating and anticipating my first e-book? I have been delaying the updates but just so you know, im just thoroughly plotting each chapter until the end ? Keep safe everyone!
This a good story. Good character, stable updates, good story development, and very good world design. I like where this story is going. Worth a try!
The writing quality is pretty good and the newness and mystery of the world is so interesting. I love the mythological aspect of the story as well as the humour. Though right now the novel is too short to judge how it will go in the future.I'm also still waiting for the FMC to be introduced and the fights though again the story hasn't even reached 20 chapters yet. The character descriptions are very detailed making visualization much easier.
I have to say this is a great novel and once you get around to 150 you learn so much and see the great potential this novel has! I hope we can eventually get 2 chapters a day ?
Have binge-read in 2 days till chapter 152 at the time of this review.
If you are reading this then know that this novel is really good and you should just start reading it. But if you need more than just "it's really good", then here is why...
At first, I thought that this is just a quick right hand exercise program. But I was wrong. And now I am so happy about it because now I have another interesting work of art to follow.
So what you will get if you start reading this novel?
---->[img=coins]NO annoying cliches. While reading this I didn't have even a single "ugh" or "that's so stup!d" and no second-hand embarrassment. You won't be bang!ng your head against the wall and you don't need to turn off your brain and filter out all the inconsistencies.
---->[img=coins]If something doesn't make full sense, then that's how it's supposed to be. Then keep that in mind and see how the author unfolds the answer and the real truth to you.
---->[img=coins]Yes. It is a lemon novel but... that is not important- you will stay reading it for the real plot and story, not the mindless PLOT that is so easy to find everywhere and makes us dumber.
---->[img=coins]And talking about lemon scenes... they are ok. Not the best I have read but not the worst too. The author has some ways to make them even better and improve- but me being a real man of culture, I had no problems with it. None.
---->[img=coins]No fillers and no useless information. Everything you read is important and I never felt like Nomanalive (the author) was just writing for the word count. I don't recommend skipping any chapter or even one conversation.
---->[img=coins]The first few chapters of the story might seem slow, but it keeps taking up the pace and is fast and exciting now, and I think that the build-up at the start was perfectly paced. Should not be a problem even for someone with ADHD.
---->[img=coins]The characters don't feel like cardboard cutouts and even if there is not that much information and story development for everyone- each of them has their own role they are playing in the novel and they don't exist only because of the mc.
---->[img=coins]MC is not some shounen protag with super plot armor. He is not even a fighter at the moment and is a normal guy, except that he has become a really talented scientist because of his hard work and will from a determination he had from childhood.
---->[img=coins]The action is not boring nor seems too long. It's easy to read and imagine. I didn't want to skip any of them even if the ones fighting were cute girls and not MC. And even then- why should I skip cute girls fighting monsters? I am a man of culture.
---->[img=coins]World building... Nothing wrong with it. It's just Earth and places whose names are numbers. It's realistic fiction and not some medieval fantasy where you need to know all the power levels, and all the kingdoms or realms to get a sense of where MC is at the moment.
---->[img=coins]MC is not a beta, nor is indecisive. He is just normal and he has his reasons for everything he has done or does and they are understandable. As one who h@tes beta Japanese mc types- it's okay to read.
---->[img=coins]NO net0 rare. The author knows who is THE man in his story. BUT- There is one scene about Nine in the library where she sneaked and saw one couple doing something. If that somehow offends you then you are too soft. It's just something that helps the plot- because of that Nine will be more intimate with our MC and that is all. Don't whine about such a small detail.
---->[img=coins]The biggest minus is the updates. We need more chapters! And there are some typos and mistakes. But as a man of culture I have an inbuilt auto-correcter where I just slide past all of the typos or wrong words. Don't let some typos stop you from enjoying this novel. They are not that bad and not that annoying like some works from authors whose 1st language is not English. This is better.
---->[img=coins]The sentences and the flow of words and conversations are smooth and easy to read. Hope no one drops it and reviews it as tr@sh only because of some typos ignoring everything else that is good about this novel.
Would want to watch this animated- that would be perfect.
To Nomanalive- thanks for the hard work you have put into your story and I hope that you don't drop this novel and continue to improve your writing so that writing becomes like breathing for you and the right words and sentences flow in your mind like unstoppable rivers. AND please start using something like Gr@mmarly- it will take care of the typos.
I really loved the stories. They were really interesting. How you portrayed the characters in each was fantastic. Please keep up the good work.
1. I got a dig bick2. You that read wrong3. You read that wrong too4. You checked5. You smiled7. You are wandering why you are still reading this8. You saw that mistake, right?(On 7)10. But did you see that I skipped 6?10. You checked11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 912. I said "saw you" not you saw13. I also skipped 214. You got tricked15. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading!
My thoughts about all the females character in the novel:........................................................................
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This book, the privilege included, was, all in all, a good book.
Feels like one of em time stopping Mangas. When will the MC/God(?)/the world(?) make all em chicks or people around them aware of the immoral things they been doing? I believe the story would be good by two levels if we get some reaction from, at the very least them chicks he been clapping, shock, surprise, embarrassment and such... Would be nice