Brother this is wild,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,You got me hooked,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,Your novel has potential,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
Dear Author,So far I'm liking what I'm reading. I'm loving the flow of the story specially the details haha. Though what I can suggest is that try to put in more content, specially the first few chapters— but that's just for me though I guess I'm just kinda used to reading books that have 2k or more words per chapter.Anyways so far I like what I'm reading and I hope the author continues on with writing not only to finish this wonderful work but also to work on more books as well in the future.(u2060｡u2060･u2060ωu2060･u2060｡u2060)u2060ﾉu2060♡Much Love,Loki
I read all the chapters. and i liked them, So i thought i should leave a review for others tp read the story. it's good
Waiting to see how Red do under all these pressureJoin me if you are interested
The beginning of this is super interesting! Great character development so far! I’m loving the amount of detail and where the story is progressing.
Why aren't more people here?? This is amazing! Let's go into details.Writing quality would need more adjustments. It gets quite clustered and a bit confusing which is bad bcs it underwhelms the feels of the story. I recommend using grammarly, and the add-ons (author's note) should also be fluidly mixed into the story. This is the only problematic part of this novel i can pin down. Stability of updates seems good enough.Story development is interesting, We follow the protagonists from their knuckeheaded state which leads them into trouble before we enter the main interlude. My advise though is that it might get confusing and thus irritating to readers so it'll do good for the novel if the exposition is written more clearly.I keep saying clearly so lemme explain-- some parts feel clustered, despite it being a first perspective, the character's thoughts and the exposition should mingle well. It clashes a lot in the story leaving the readers quite confused. It'd great if author manages to capture the choas of the character's mind while streamlining the exposition with it. Smoothness, that's what i'm talking about. To be blunt, the writing feels a bit jarring and difficult to follow due to its slight erraticness.Despite its jaggard edges i see immeasurable potential, i like the dialogue and the way they speak. The characters feels authentic, from the two shi- idk but mc and their? friend. To infinity, i quite like her sleeping danger vibes, it was executed quite well enough to leave a lasting impression on readers (me haha).In conclusion, this feels raw. I see the potential, its impressive, the synopsis hooked me from the very first instant and I'm not kidding- who wouldn't like to see two brats messing up the world? Well i most definitely do. Believe it or not its an original concept.But it'd benefit from more editing. Like i say, it feels like the rawest version straight from the author's mind. More delibration would do it well, do consider author. Regardless, kudos to this wonderful piece of fiction. Keep going author, oh and I lied, you're cringe but you're not the only cringe one, we all are! And that's why you need to be cringe for us the cringe readers to actually enjoy... okay lemme see myself out lol.
Thanks for the novel. I have been waiting for a sci-fi novel just like this
I love your writing style and how easy it is to read. As a writer, the best way is to show and not tell the reader and you did exactly that. Great job, author!
If you haven't started this book yet, what are you waiting for? I've only just begun, and I'm already in love with it! This is the second book I'm reading by Miss B., and I'm absolutely obsessed with her writing skills. We're here to support you every step of the way Miss B. and we can't wait for the updates!Your crazy fan ?
I'm not going to lie because the reason I came here was because I hoped you could help me by checking out my novel then inform me if it's interesting or not but then I decided to read your novel and I tell you this the novel has a lot of potential but the first chapter is confusing to me a bit and i didn't even understand what was going on, but I could see from the beast manifestation abilities the characters has shown and the chapter of the second title [Mega Planet] it makes me feel like the world background of the novel is huge
wow,I love this story,it is giving me vibes
Well, after reading the first chapters, it really got me hooked, especially the writing style, very atmospheric, I can say. I'll wait for the continuation.