This story has a lot of potential, hope mc aspires to gain power and immortality
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honestly was pretty hyped to read it after reading the title and synopsis, but the tags absolutely ruined it...
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The novel still has a few chapters, so it’s too early for a more thorough critique. However, it stands out for the emotional immersion of the protagonist, who transitions from a mundane life to a dangerous, fantastical world. A positive aspect is how the author successfully conveys the character’s internal struggle, drawing the reader into his despair and his efforts to adapt to his new reality. This creates empathy and curiosity about his evolution.One area for improvement would be balancing the game mechanics with the narrative. At times, the detailed explanations of the system can interrupt the flow of the story. Simplifying or better integrating these elements could help the plot flow more naturally, though it doesn't detract from the overall reading experience.In summary, it's a story with great potential that could benefit from more fluidity in its construction. Good luck with your writing!
Hi everyone! I'm the author of this work. Here are a few warnings and points to note for any lurkers who might be looking to give this book a shot. (i) This book contains profanity, gore, and sometimes tragedy. Discretion is strongly advised. (ii) The story typically mimics battle shonen but occasionally explores some sensitive or controversial themes, including bullying, substance abuse, domestic violence, oppression, suicide, murder, genocide, and maybe some more others along the line. As the author, I DO NOT glorify any of these. But I understand that we all have different interpretations of these themes, so if you find my representation triggering or offensive, feel free to leave a comment. I could consider reviewing, and even if I don't, it could serve as a warning for someone else. (iii) This story presents an elaborate urban fantasy world with a complex power system that slowly expands as the story progresses to avoid information overload, which could be annoying at the start of a novel. The main, long-term plot is about the long-running conflict between two opposing forces (Dells and Deathbringers), underscoring the roles each important character plays in these conflicts. At first, Keres, the main protagonist, is shrouded in mystery as he navigates an environment he abhors with no memories of his past but the answers to every mystery slowly reveal themselves as he embarks on his journey of self-discovery and atonement. (iv) The political and religious depictions are entirely fictional and do not represent my views on similar real-world entities. (v) Characters are intentionally written to be imperfect; I strongly advise against using them as real-life moral compasses. (vi) The depictions of people with trauma and mental health complications DO NOT exist to condemn those suffering from these issues. Please, if you're an expert or you suffer from any similar conditions, or know someone who does, and you find my representation harmful, kindly contact me about it. Thanks for your time. I hope you have an enjoyable experience!
Writing Quality: Not a native English speaker, so take my opinion on writing with a grain of salt, I didn't notice any grammar errors or any problems with sentence structure, but the author has a problem with repetitive description of the main character's thoughts and facial expression multiple times in the same chapter.Story development: In the first 43 chapters, the story progressed quite a lot, it explained how the system works, the talent of the mc and others and how they work, what related skills they gain from leveling and more.Character design: In 43 chapters, we got to know the main character (Nyx) and three of his followers (Viktor, Lucas, Ryan) characters on the surface level, they're only given one or two unique characteristics without going too deep into their character this needs to be addressed in the future but for now it's good enough (but please stop the pickering between Viktor and Lucas because this isn't funny if this was you trying to add comedy into the story it isn't working)Updating stability: From what I saw, it's 5 chapters weakly (I may be wrong, tho), so it works enough for me.World Background: Post apocalyptic earth with system and tower nothing too crazy or unique, but it's good regardless.I have two points I want clarification on, so I hope the author answers me1- Will this story contain Harem or romance (for the mc)? If so, please tell me because I truly don't enjoy it, especially in novels with an mc like this (simply doesn't make sense).2- Will this involve elements of army or kingdom building in the future? because he's already created a nameless organisation, so I think it's possible (which is something I enjoy)
Great! I loved this work man. I love it I don't even want to do anything else except reading this novel. I want you to make more books on various categories. I hope you can do that and make sure our mc is clever instead of dumb strength possessed mass murderer.
I'm having a good development from the beginning, the protagonist is not too idiotic and the plot simply does not make everyone look like idiots.At the moment we are on chapter 22 if I remember correctly and I hope that the personality of the protagonist advances with his ambitions and becomes someone Dominant like a tyrant. Let him only defend interests, since he comes from below and only his fat partner helps him as a roommate. Help him contribute in the future to repay that favor.
world building 10/10characters 10/10power system 10/10mystery 1000/1000this is peak
nice novel with very good story at begenning
This story hits harder than Semibreve missiles truly one of the greatest novel that I has read -member of the merchan guild