I was reading this as a favor to the author but I must say I am incredibly impressed. The use of vivid imagery combined with just right amount of action keeps my interest throughout the entire prologue. I am curious to see this Ojero and what he us all about. But still, so far I am very impressed with his story telling and world building abilities. Well done. Just one critique, what does Lazarus look like?
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before giving up I say at least read till chapter 5 I am writing this on Chapter 17the only reason I didn't give 5 is because of updates (says he is working on original so ok) the author leans a little too much toward perfection, better than sh*ty word count completing author, some if not many chapter are 4-5k words. . . from what I have read this fan fiction way better than what you find on platform reaching close to the level of AO3 The author himself said things will be get more planned and better Excutioned after chapter 15.2 although they were good enough before that. Reason - 1 - Not the generic, overused stuff (read till 17) 2- There is good action. (read till ch 5 you will know) 3 - Things just don't happen ( if they do) he shows the thing behind it like in chapter 1 how they got to that point will be later discovered4- Personal I like slow burn but it's not that slow either. 5- The power system for monster Hunter is done good enough although a little generic but there might be lot to unravel there (we have hardly explored that) 6- Original character and focusing on less focused character, class b students as of chapter 16 (at least that's what he said and shows in the new chapter) we will have to wait to see how he does that but let's give him the doubt 7 - Dark gruesome blood doesn't leave mich details. 8 - This one is pure personal, we have seen so many murders or Assassins reincarnated into fiction but the they act like a child or completely normal no trauma, no nothing like their past is an explanation for there op ness, everything they did in past is just simple gone. The author have taken a realistic approach showing the mental problems of mc, the scars and how he acts because of his past ( which we have hardly explored so there should be a lot of sauce there)
everything is good guys i just fing this line funny ??( killed by his giant sword ) IYKYk
keep writing keep writing keep writing. This joint will be groundbreaking for years to come.
This is a Good Story with potential to be among the top fantasy ones. I have to say that originally i came to just test some chapters but now I am hooked . Waiting for the next chapters ......And his ability to mimic .... can't he copy the skills of the so-called divine one who reincarnated him?.Looking forward to new chapters . I hope you will succeed in your writing .
When routine bites hard and ambitions are lowAnd resentment rides high, but emotions won't growAnd we're changing our ways, taking different roadsThen love, love will tear us apart againLove, love will tear us apart again- Lyrics from Love Will Tear Us Apart. Joy Division. 1980.
Seen the security guard there. I greet the Securityman like a normal day. "Hi Securityman."
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Although the comparison of their forces was far from Hitler's army, namely 1:10. Victory is still a mystery because at that time, the entire country was destroyed. "
Have you ever heard of Asylum? A prison for people like us. Which is handled by crazy people who think we are crazy.