The Crimson Ripper

It is great read. However the girl doesn’t help the male Mc much and he is weaker than his girlfriend. I personally don’t like that but you should still give it a read and decide for yourself.

There are a couple of things that don't make sense... the mc shouldn't be that fat...He bikes to university every day and because he is at university he wouldn't spend anything on takeouts or tons of junk food to save money. It was also mentioned he didn't spend money like water and always saved what he earned. Boosting the fact that this makes little sense...To me, it just feels like you made him like that as a joke to try and make it funny. Leading to this being extremely forced...I'm not trying to hate, I'm just stating the fact that it just doesn't make sense giving the background you bought him upon. I also feel like him being a "chubby" elf is going to be a reoccurring joke throughout until he slims down from the training.For me, this is just going to annoy tf outta me as I will always think back to this and how it was forced anyway leading to all mentions of it just annoying me more each time. If that makes sense?I hope this doesn't happen constantly with the forced try at humour as it would be extremely disappointing. If you want humour it will flow naturally in the story. There is no need to force it as it will just bring down the story as a whole. Oh, another thing is his chosen name. Like wtf? Who cares what it means in Chinese? He is an elf... chose an elf name. His own name Eldrian? Is more fcking elfy than Haru...  If he was a human I wouldn't mind him having the name Haru but he is not. He is an elf... It's like the mc is a dragon and calling it Haru. It doesn't fit at all. The immersive feel of the book is again compromised by doing this. I am assuming the Author is chinses? Again this is not hate so don't take it as that. It's just you are writing about an elf so why give it a human name? That sort of thing. So far it isn't looking like a great book but I haven't read a lot yet. I will read further and change the review depending on how it reads later.

definitely did not get hooked by the cover.. yep definitely not..i umm.. got hooked by the synopsis hmm yes the synopsis..what a beautiful synopsis, those beautiful curves.. what a great cursive font, and wow! those huge round... bold letters, they look very bree.. readable *cough* *cough*

It's a good story so far.  The story development is interesting, as is the character design and world background.  The main character has a good head on his shoulders, and seems to have real life abilities that he can transfer into the game.  Good job.

This is a new novel and people will not remove their reviews of the last novel. Love the book and thought I should let you enjoy it too. Just leave a comment or a review of how much you like or dislike the book and I will most likly answer.

an interesting book, I most like the main character who is a bit childish and cute.I hope he'll turn into a child again, it would be facenating