*This just my initial review*
okay Mr. Author..
the concept of your story is.. good, i cant say great but.. average and for me its good..
but your style of writting is not good for short-med chapter.
conversations is broken by explanations, Info dump here and there. should make AUX chapter rather than dump on chapters because it feel cheap for pay-to-read.
example of conversations..
MC: "Hello there"
*Explanations of something useless or irrelevant*
Girl: "hey, how're you"
*inner monologoue with 2-4 paragraph of explanations*
that is not good style of writting for short-med chapter my bro..
if you want that style, you have to be use 10-15K words, and cant be less..
this is just my opinions.
because this annoying for me, that Also this is PAY-TO-READ. this is not worth kinda feeling i have. maybe just for me, but maybe there is some readers feel the same.
i dont know,
thanks.