I only really have one comment, and it’s vital that the person publishing this book on here reads it: Please, for the love of god, find someone to handle the grammar for you. Find a proper translator to handle this so it doesn’t look so blocky or cut off in areas.I read the last book you had on here, but after a while, the grammar started causing massive headaches. Your story has plenty of potential, you’re a great Storyteller. However, you NEED to find someone who can make it look more readable. You will scare away hundreds of potential readers who can’t handle this lack of care towards the language and the story. Otherwise, you’re doing great. Just make sure you work hard to find someone who has English as their first language to properly go through and fix the grammar. Using translation tools DOES NOT WORK.