HARRY POTTER:the Brothers

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This one is rough, the grammar issues are bad enough to ruin the story. I find it hard to even follow the story developement when I'm trying to figure out what the author is even trying to say.

Keren banget,suka ...Ceritanya bikin aku hanyut terbawa arus ...Karakternya kuat banget, ga sia2 aku mampir ke sini, aaaaa lop lop pokoknya ❤️

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Great that the story begins with a strong, emotional hook. There is also a nice contrast between the tragical and the lighthearted, sometimes underlined by dialogue that is suitable for real characters that are a bit lost in the melancholy of the life they lead. It is really good that this started out the way it did. Now I apparently have to wait to read more, a shame, since I just got into the story and the concept is intriguing enough that this ➡️ my library

The first chapter gives out as little as possible and it pulls you in and keeps you interested to read on more and more. I feel like it's a bit early for me to say anything about the character but I have a feeling that I'll end up liking the MC. Just a gut feeling. Amazing writing, amazing story, and world-building is just *chef's kiss.*Good luck to the author!