Genius Mage in a Cultivation World

As usual, shameless review of one star of the author <3 I hope everyone will like the story, as I poured my heart and soul in making it. Hehe... To think I would be limited by the minimal amount of words in a review of my own novel...

the story looks good but the grammar upsets me :c, also some sudden turns in the naration, like going from he to i in the middle of the naration lowers the seriousness of the work. Some concepts are partialy badly exlplained, but lets say thats part of the story.
Author should reread his work a bit more

A magician as the main character is always difficult, since there are a lot of things to consider, it's hard for me to call the main character a magician. Non-linear storytelling is used out of place, and in general we will remember about it after half a year? There are enough questions for the minor characters. The idea of ​​the novel is very good, but nothing more.
This is what I collected in the first 40 chapters.

As usual, Sloth's work never ceased to amaze his readers. Follow Layn if you love the genre. I was reading the book from chapter 13 before reverted back to chapter 4 - 5 - 6 for the new kind of language sloth created just for the sake of his novel. And then, I return to chapter 1 again to savor the beginning of the story once again.

This won't be the last of lazy sloth. It's a masterpiece.

Unfortunately, the hero of justice is a saint who thinks he is an angel who mourns the death of a girl whom he does not know. Even her tribe, who lived with them for many years, did not care about her death. This hero is just a few minutes of grief for her.  disgusting

The story and world seem well thought out and interesting.  The characters are a struggle to read.  I keep stopping and doing something else for a while before coming back to this.  I want to like it.  I want to enjoy it because the premise is one I like and the world seems interesting.  But I keep losing interest whenever I read character interactions.  

The language thing at the start is really cool.  The wall/gate is interesting.  I really like the fire dog fight.  The premise of a mage in a cultivation world is a great one.  I have read maybe three or four books that try to cover it and all were either cut short (Essence of Cultivation) or fell off (Dao of Magic).

The MC and a potential FL are really our only two main characters in the first twenty chapters.  The MC just feels off somehow.  Disjointed.  He has a lot going on and much of it feels like it doesn't have the emotional weight it should.  

The FL is painful to read.  All the blushing, trembling, and other things she does rather than talking.  This is a woman that is supposed to be out risking her life in battle, has gone through some apparently harsh life experiences, and she acts like a coy 4 year old who is also a well adjusted adult?  I think the author is trying to run with the jade beauty cliche while also spicing it up/filling it out but again it just is not fun to read.

I am glad I read it.  I would encourage others to read it to see if they can get past the characters.  But I won't be continuing from here.