Is English not your first language? this is an unreadable mess. Run on sentences, no paragraphs, no proper quotations and separations for spoken words. I mean what I was able to read seemed like it might be good but the atrocious grammar ruins it completely.
one of the best Game of Thrones fan fiction available to read. yes the writing could be better at times but the author himself was honest that he came back to writing after a long time so it's manageable . But by heavens the way the author is building up the world is absolutely incredible
i love this. I just wish you would udate sooner [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] [img=recommend]
The use of lol like a nervous tick and the lack of elijahs eloquence makes it stupid if you are writing a character we all know and love u have to do it well and this is annoying sorry mate its just not for me
