Fate Online: Shadow

Wow this author is really shameless, 3 times of deleted review already cause it was getting likes from the readers since they can relate to what I said that it was full of inconsistency and we,with the author, even argued about it but dude just said "go make your own novel and make one thats better than harry potter lmao. So here I am again to make a review to counter your shamelessness of deleting low rating reviews.

** Im gonna make one again if you delete this again so yah

Hey guys!

ApocX here! If you didn't start reading this novel, I suggest you start right now. It is definitely something you will enjoy, especially for those VRMMO and Romance novel fans! ;)

Don't mind the shameless 5 Star Rating.

Update Schedule - Daily.

I still have my main novel Stronghold In The Apocalypse to write so I can't write more.

Enjoy reading! :)

P.S If you leave a bad review for the story, then make sure it's something that would help in the improvement of the story, because I sure as hell would delete it.

Needs a tonne of work, props to the author and I wish him/her the best of luck.

I must say, the first chapter was imho, freaking terrible. It was all over the place, nonsensical mish mash of all the best stuff someone could think of for a modern day mc slapped together into an abomination called Michael.

I seriously could not bring myself to read another chapter, I dont say this to discourage the author, it's hard to write! I understand that it isn't easy. This book needs some serious editing and the author needs to just sit and relax a bit, your mc never has to be the everything guy! The best things about characters in novels arent their perfections but their imperfections! All their flaws make them come alive and make your readers empathise with them through their journey! The best thing you can do for your audience is to make them always think about the qualities of our creations that resonate with them! Connecting with them makes your story stand out from the rest of the monotonous garbage that litters this app.

You should (If you haven't already but suggesting by the hazardous writing that feels like its come straight from your head to being published) brain storm ideas, the direction you want to go, important antagonists and/or ideas for ones to come! Major turning points in your story that will affect your mc in major ways! These sort of plot points are needed so you can have some sort of direction to love in otherwise it becomes a mess, something that becomes harder to fix the longer you go. Never start the fillings before you've conquered your outline and outlook of where you want your story to go!

You may not read this but I seriously hope this helps if you do kind regards

Asking for stones for this is an insult to all authors.You should try to write the plot on a piece of paper then see if what you write next actually fits with what is already there

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It feels very fake and the quality is below average. Sorry, no offence. I read the first few chapters and it was very basic and the articulation was not smooth at all. Even the smallest of details and cause dislike and irritation to the reader. The plot was also not too in depth, it went into the story line so quick that it just doesn't feel right.