This is a intersting story from what has been written so far. I am intrested in what will happen next. What I say is my opion and suguestion to help your book become better so please don't take it the wrong wayFirstly for me, It was not scary. When I read Horror/Thiller books with are nomarly Steven King. I want to be right there with the MC expericing the horror and the diolage that is written now if given more details to the world and the backround to make me feel like i am there can work. The chapters that you repeated the same dilolage twice is a clever use of diloage and can be used if it is altered in such a way that it is from the other persons perpesive. In genreal this is a good book and has the potional to be a great horror book " If you want to be a writer, you must do two things above all others: read a lot and write a lot" Stephen King
