Uncontrollable Temptation

Writing is rushed and seems to be an imitation of Astral Pet Store, so originality wise it's just a copy even the most of the plots I.e Old man with pet food and the first few customers. I could stand that, but the plot lines are quite squished together with not much story, not much monologue either and just tries with cheap tricks that makes no sense.

This is the best story. I am hooked from the first chapter only. This is intense, a mysterious story which kept you hook all the time. This is really a new story to read. Supernatural beings always attract readers and why the answer is here in this book. Your storytelling is the really awesome dear author. Awesome ?

I don't even know how to start, this book begins like every other book, a seemingly normal video game alternate reality life.But then the author takes it a step further and makes this alternate reality  *reality* and this is where things  start happening, its is like the unvailing of a mystery slowly showing its true colours (I can't think of a better analogy for this); suddenly this book is not so simple or normal anymore, its no longer like every other book as everything begins to revolve around a single entity  *FATE*Unfortunately the book is still in the hatching stage and only a few cracks have appeared on its shell but this is a book worthy of reading, probably worthy of being best seller if that concept exists in web novel.The character's are well developed and have the depth of actual living human beings.The plot setting is also well made with no holes detected yet (although I'm not a professional so I may be wrong)The writing style is neat and easy to understand, no unaccounted names flying aroundI would even suggest this book go premuim if I wasn't so poor and don't want to give it up anytime soon(quite selfish of me?).

It was great as always as i say the language is very good and the storyline too tho so keep it up as they do make a great time pass and waiting for the next part

"I'm quite vexed with you." She fell silent and gave the phone an accusing stare. "Back before winter break you promised you'd come back from Tokyo before the winter trimester." This time her bottle received an angry glare while she contemplated how to continue. "But when school started you weren't back." She ran out of words and drank twice. "You know, I've only met you twice since then. I'm lonely here."

In the forest hidden was three people a woman and two man. Yes they are exactly who you think they are. They are my lovable parents Ah Yin and Tang Hao, While the other green haired dude who was black on his whole face from seeing the spectacle of my hidden weapons was the overprotective teasing grandpa Dugu Bo.