It seems likea good story, but badly translated. Despite many missing connecting words, and improper word form choices, I was interested enough to keep reading until I ran out of chapters. I suspect that practice will improve the writing quickly, because the story telling is decent in spite of the slightly broken English.Some suspension of disbelief is required for me, since the setting feels rather game-within-a-game, but as long as I set aside the expectation that the main character lives in the same reality that I do, it seems fairly consistent so far.
