The Blood Queen (DxD x MultiCross)

Quite entertaining, in terms of the sports novels I've read, this ranks near the top even with the quasi MTL nature of the writing (honestly not that bad, but maybe i've read too much MTl). I can't specifically that there are parts were the novel particularly excels, but the everything is quite satisfactory and there are no real problems I have with it, also the main character is not intolerable and actually somewhat acts his age. There is a sprinkle of racism/political agenda, but that was mainly against a hong kong team, so far there hasn't been any international play, so this maybe become more prevalent. I do like that they are other characters around the MC and it's not just him by himself, I hope that the 2 other guys in his team also follow him, at-least to the CBA or maybe national team?Overall, pretty entertaining!

I couldn't read further. The MC is stupid. Completely retarded. And his personality is so bland. I really looked forward to the storyline because it was a unique setting but unfortunately the author ruined it with bad quality characters. I don't recommend this. His decisions are just dumb to the point where you just sigh and exist from the novel.

Take my words as a passing wind for I have only skimmed through your work.Separate your paragraphs such that they contain 2 to 4 sentences depending on length, otherwise it would be too taxing to read.Apologies for not reading the entire story.Write well and don't hesitate to ask for help from other authors in the official discord server of inkstone. You can be a better writer.

"Aw! S-sorry!" malakas na sambit ko dahil may nabunggo ako. Napaangat ang ulo ko kasabay ng mata ko, natigilan ako. "R-Rius?" mahinang usal ko.

"You'll be the prettiest no matter what." Jungkook whispered and stole another kiss.

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