One Man's Journey (2nd Draft)

So let me start by saying I have generally enjoyed this novel. It has a different focus and theme than a lot on the platform, and that not only is unique but also refreshing.On other hand I also have a few issues with it as well. (Tldr. Not bad for a quick filler read, but needs improvement)1. A very forgetful (or stupid MC)This guy would forget where his glasses were right after he put them on. I feel like the shock the author is trying to portray at certain plot events was simply done incorrectly, resulting in a character that can't understand why anything is happening when he was already explained thoroughly before.2. Pacing feels offI can 200% get behind a novel that doesn't drag its feet, but this feels almost to rushed. Or maybe it is too undetailed? There is just a lot of athletic results before and after training, then face smacking. While information is given about athletics (something the average reader may not know about), I feel like I'm missing the sweat and tears these athletes are putting in, or the work the MC is doing with them. I dont really feel like much is ever happening as time flies by.3. A very undetailed systemSystems are fun and all, and I love myself a good sentient one. But I feel as if there is no proper explanation how or why anything the system is doing happens. Tieing into the previous point, since there is no description of how anything happens, it feels as if everything is normal but results are magically different for no other reason than "because system" The systems usage here feels like the usage of "Magic" in poorly written fantasy novels. It just does whatever helps the plot/MC without proper reasoning or rules.4. Overly repetative chapters.This is a theme I've noticed in many novels and is honestly my biggest problem with this one. Through half a chapter a series of events will happen, and after someone gets their face slapped they reflect on EVERYTHING that happened. I'm not talking a sad "i regret misjudging them so rashly" comment. I mean a straight up multiparagraph synopsis of everything that went down. It's important to show proper repercussions for actions, especially for antagonists, but damn does it seem like the author is trying to add filler, constantly. It may be due to translations issues but honestly it just feels silly at times.That's about it. All said and done I still enjoy this novel for what it is and plan to keep reading. Will update this review as neccessary. Have a great day/night, and thank you author and translators for your hard work! <3

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Another system novel where MC intelligence shows author is either 5 years old or mentally handicapped. He sells things that are worth hundreds of gold for couple pieces of silver and yet everyone thinks he's such an amazing and cunning person while the rest of the novel is spent simping on every woman that comes across and acting like a dog despite being the son of the most powerful man in the entire region...

it's a slow paced novel but i quite like itsome might be put off by that but anyone who likes Cultivation novels that is not too slow and not too fast paced plot this is for you

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Its a one shot story thats has good character choosing.