Love Slave to My Devil CEO Boss

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The story had just started to pick up. I wouldn't say it was amazing, but it was OK. Then it happened, they set ads on the last three chapters. I almost dropped the story then, but I didn't. Watching a short advertisement wouldn't hurt too much.The story then became a bit better, then got a bit worse lately. And now, when the story is kind of in a bad spot...they decided to go premium? Hahaha! I can't stop laughing. Had you gone premium after building a strong following, I'd understand. But now? You can read those chapters on your own! Asta la vista baby. I'm gone!

There are parts of the story that are well thought out and have a unique take on the cultivation shstem that differs from other stories. And i have no issue with them being able to fight stronger people, but at times it they can utterly destroy someone nearing the peak of a realm, but then a few days later absolutely struggle to fight someone at the same power. I haven’t read with the updates, as in keeping up with chapter releases. But reading through at once, it feels like the story is rushed and isn’t fully developed. A lot of things aren’t really explained or given background. It also seems that over 80% of females in this story look absolutely the same except hair/eye color.I know this sounds like i despise the story, but i truly don’t. I think the setting and the story itself are good, but a lot of potential is missed out on and lack of variety/creativity in characters. i.e. busty women with big butt… literally all of them and given the same body description.

As I wish to deliver on the request of being entirely brutally honest, I must say that this review may appear rather negative. I focused mainly on what - in my best opinion- has the most need or potential for improvement (in the hope to help you progress rather than simply sing you praise).The very start of your story has the potential to be immersive, but fails to grasp my attention. I think this is due to the fact that there is an absence of rhythm in your writing, something I noticed as well further throughout the rest of your work.The characters feel sympathetic but I fail to imagine them. They appear to be cut out of cardboard and don’t feel like actual people. You have given me some idea on how they look but I would like to know more about the way they stand, their posture, their bearing.I want to see more personality. Give me some originality. Give me some flaws! Dimples, scars, dry lips. Do they pick their nails? Play with their sleeves? Show me peculiar character details. Any particular violence, abruptness or charm in the way they move? A particular way they move their eyebrows? Do they make exaggerated hand motions when they talk? Nonchalant scratching? Do they look away at some points during discussions? Do their smiles reach their eyes?As your reader, these things tell me a lot more about the characters than the colour of their hair. I wish for texture, intensity and sensation.The dialogue is fairly woody; it sounds forced and not quite genuine. As for the romance; it is a bit entertaining, but it does not thoroughly convince me and the ‘chemistry’ seems obligatory. I am not especially rooting for the relationship, although as a reader I need to get a secondhand infatuation with the love interest.The overall quality of your grammar is rather poor, but not as poor as other works on webnovel. I do appreciate that you clearly put a lot of effort in your work. I applaud your enthusiasm and sincerely hope that my harshness did not dissuade you from continuing.

"You mean you hadn't watch Porn before?" I shook my head. "I had watched maybe Once a Week. But most of the time I read smuts.So imagining things with it is much more said like it" I said turning shy. "Damn my girl is wild... But have you touched yourself?" I shook my head,disgusted.

Duman Junhe agreed, and seemed a little more lighthearted, now that they had what seemed to be the beginnings of a strategy. Nevertheless, the handsome fellow turned to Wumu Qian once again, and jerked his chin up at the youngest of the trio.