GBF: Fighting Fire

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I see the comments in the first three chapters and I don't know what to say. The readers are complaining about grammar most of the time, they forget to see the story itself, the character is that topical brainless muscle headed, for what I can see. The world is average, so as the story development. There's too many things to improve, but the idea is amazing, and the author must persist if he can improve.

Lanjutkan gan, bagus nih cerita ?

Yours sincerely,

And just as they were about to engage in springtime activities, a thunderous sound rang throughout the whole room as Issei's phone broke off their steamy hot flames of war.

"I found the last of you." The woman said, as the door slowly creaked open.