Damien's Hellverse

Just gonna say... Stacy be the real og, she a homie. 4.6 stars because I don't feel the story really progressed fast enough, at chap 35 nothing has changed a sufficient amount given its been 35 chaps. He still has the same 2 girls, same problems, nothing new since chap 1 (other than getting 2 of the 3 girls, of course).Other than story development being a little slow ? It's top notch ?Worthy of the 1st place it has ?

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System/game stories are not my thing but this was pretty good! Sage is a very relatable character that the audience can easily sympathize with. I like how the author describes actions in this story. The part I didn't like was when the author would put text in [* I don't mind sound effects or noises being written like that but sometimes the author would write stuff like [*busy*]. It doesn't make sense to me and there were also a few grammatical issues. However, the rest of the story was pretty good!

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This perfect painting system was very malicious and fierce!

[He knows that I'm lying]