The premise of this story is really interesting! Like I'd love to read something like this, but the execution needs some work.The English is okay, but could do with a run or two through grammarly.The update speed isn't up to the standard seen on WN. The plot development seems very forced in a few aspects and lacks detail. There's little sense of time and the MC does these gigantic projects in the space of minutes or hours - yes things are sped up but it all seems arbitrary - theres mot much logic behind time taken and projects completed. The characters introduced so far are slightly different, but dont have much personality to them beyond the basic profilesWorld building is light on details so far, and seemingly random, minimal sense of scale. Thank you author for writing this, Im only giving an honest opinion - I hope you continue writing and improving! Ive tried writing before and its very, very hard!D.W.
