Julie and Kara, two down-on-their-luck young women, were struggling to find stable employment and a home when they unexpectedly found themselves facing a far greater challenge than they had anticipated...
okay it's good but the court scene needs to shine harder. you mc needs to be strong on the outside, but falling apart on the inside what is her internal conflict? what does her father mean to her?
second drop the first paragraph you don't need it, it takes away from the interest the courtroom
