Alpha - Book 1 in the Jaro Trilogy
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A group of friends are hired to test a new game linked to a powerful corporation. They soon find out though that they are not just testing the game, but helping create it. What will happen to them inside the game or more importantly, in real life?

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Hi folks! I wanted to let you know a few things before you start reading;

-This is my first book, but I have already planned this out to a trilogy.

-This is the rough, pre-edited version of the book. I do plan on putting this up on at least Amazon when completed.

-One of the things I tried to do in this is make the characters speak in a normal manner, so you will notice some grammar issues in their speech. This is done on purpose because I've given up on correcting people in real life with regards to the 'Me and John' stuff.

-Let me know what you think! I've left links at the end of each chapter on how to reach me.

-John

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Okay look. The writing style and interactions between characters are fine. But the way every single person continues to stroke the main character's c*ck is ridiculous. "How a loser bacame a prince charming". Lets talk about that.He didn't become anything. He literally woke up as handsome dude. He didn't die and get sent back in time, more like he went to a damn different timeline altogether. Similar but with him already a "school hunk" and that's just bull****. We dont see a gradual shift form lose to prince charming, we see a prince charming become even more likeable because of reasons. Like what the hell? I dont hate the story. Other than the characters being shallow and praising the main character at every turn, its fine. Its just that over twenty chapters in there is still no REAL plot developement. I would not really recommend this to anyone because of the lacking character design, but for just a light read that you shouldn't take too seriously? Its good enough for that. Dont expect anything other than a superficial harem of adoring fans for the MC who exist to just make him look good though. If you can withstand all the aforementioned c*ck-stroking then give this a try.
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I don't care about Michael Fang ir his territory. The author didn't manage to make me care about the MC. The story was enjoyable for a while even if it wasn't the greatest but at some point I realized I never was invested in the characters and so I stopped reading after 300 chapters.The author never gives information until it's too late. It's like he didn't have an idea in mind but kept writing and when he made a decision he gave us the information out of the blue.One example is the MC's family. His parents disappeared and we don't know why but we learn hundreds of chapters later the MC knew all along why. It was just never shared with the reader and we thought there was some mystery but no.Another one is the way the author nerfs MC to make him struggle. It was never explained why he was slow in cultivation until the author gave us the information. Information which is widely known and his teachers could have told him but same thing, the information was shared when the author thought about it, it wasn't something secret or anything so why the wait?I feel like the author isn't sure of hiw his story will unfold so he describes nothing.MC made plans with people and he has insightful ideas. We don't know the plan and what MC's ideas are.His territory gets bigger and better but no details about his territory. We don't know how his people live, what's around it and who manage it when MC is away. It should be the maid but she is also busy with fighting monsters. 20000 people in his territory, he is away often and apparently there is no governing body.Too many things are so vague, secondary characters aren't developed and like always, MC has a very short time to save the day. I will remove the novel from my library.
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I have been reading this for a while now and I must say that the plot is interesting and it makes me curious ?️??. But, If there's something you need to improve, maybe you're expressing in words but overall, it's good!?
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BORING AS F*CK!!! CHAPTER 18 STILL NOTHING IS HAPPENING!! IS THE MC ON THIS STORY THE YOUNGER SISTER?? FROM CHAPTER 1 TO CHAPTER 15 IT'S ALL ABOUT THE SISTER.. SO BORING!
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The premise of the story is something I quite liked. Ofc there were some minor grammar error but those can be overlooked. The pacing and the way different perspective were written were fast and weird. Scenarios were shifting around rapidly without much context. But overall I really liked it quite a lot. Would love a bigger worldbuilding but it a short novel read and I enjoyed it really much.
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