A Bride for Donnigan

Hi1. The Einstein once said. The definition of insanity is doing the same thing over and over and expecting different results. The MC confessed to the very same girl more than 400 times during 4 years without getting any answer. Just from that you can see he is an idiot. That girl is the same. Maybe it is good that two idiots found one another. But from my perspective it is a tragedy.2. The story is good for 2-3 hours of reading but it becomes boring later. All the same.. I really do think that books more tham 700-800 chapters are overkill. Before writing the book you should know how to end it. Make a story and only then write. Imagine if you start to build a house but you do not know how it will looks like or how many floors/rooms it will have what will you build?? This book is exactly the same. Author just spilling words for updates. The more you read the worse it becomes.3. There is no system to measure the person power. The MC learns something becomes stronger and stronger but how strong exactly? How much one skill stonger than the other? Magic force, dream force, star force e.t.c. what are the ranking between them? I completly lost track... It all looks like a mess and who is stronger depends on author mood. If it is so why write about cultivation, levels, forces. All of them are meaningless.4. The overall feeling about the book is negative. People stuggling, dying, scheming, used by others.... There is no real trust, support, loyalty, happiness in the book (almost none). Most of it is negative. Can not continue anymore.

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Very good story.I really like this type of stories, which deal with the lives of the characters, with a limited number of them and that are charismatic where you can believe that they are real people and not just cardboard cutouts.The grammar is very good and it is an easy read, highly recommended to read it. Very good story.I really like this type of stories, which deal with the lives of the characters, with a limited number of them and that are charismatic where you can believe that they are real people and not just cardboard cutouts.The grammar is very good and it is an easy read, highly recommended to read it.

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First of all, the idea of Anima is inspired by Gu from Reverend Insanity but I've put my own twist on it. Hopefully it's at least a little bit original and you like it.Outside of that, I think the book is quite unique, especially in terms of how the world is and what the main character is like. However, I won't say too much other than that the MC is pure evil.Best parts of the novel:Characters - The main characters all have depth and personality, but it's not just them. Every character has at least some thought behind them, even throwaway characters. That means you won't get scenes where side characters act stupidly for no reason.Quality of writing (I am English, I speak great English, don't expect spelling errors or anything)World building - I've put a lot of effort into creating the continents, thinking about what species live there, what environments there will be and all that good stuff. I'm especially proud of the more that will start to be revealed as the novel goes on.Bad bits:Dialogue - Some conversations may seem a little clunky or stiff. This is the main area of my writing that I'm trying to improve, so hopefully dialogue will become more natural and free-flowing as the novel progresses.Slow(ish) development - The novel isn't a slow starter at all, it begins with 3 high action trials and there are lots of fight scenes after that as well. What I mean is that characters and places will not be developed right away. I will take time with these things and you won't get huge lumps of backstory or information about people, places or things.Changes in writing style - I have written other things before, but this is my first full-length novel, so my writing style will change and develop as the novel progresses.P.S. I would really appreciate comments about which parts of the novel you enjoyed and which bits could be better. These kinds of comments will help me become a better writer, which will in turn make this a better novel. Thank you for reading and I hope you enjoy the book!

Qualità della storia molto buona fin'ora, spero che l'autore continui in questa direzione perché la storia ha un gran potenziale. ??????????????????????